能否批改一下我写的考研英语二2017年真题的小作文？

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  • 郑老师
    (1)as is vividly depicted in the picture(描述图画).(2) the most striking feature is(图画重点信息).(3)there is no doubt that its symbolic meaning subtly conveyed should be given deep consideration.
    第二自然段重点论述主题，第一句可以用一个有爆发力的主题句阐释主题的重要性。第二句谈这个现象的永恒的社会意义可以用一个排比句说明只要有这个现象就可以让我们不断征服挑战和竞争并最后走向成功。第三句可以是具体的例子谈根据一项调查表明这个积极的现象对人有利。第四句可以从反面谈如果没有这个积极现象人们生活就忧闷有挫折感无前进动力前途渺茫。第五句作总结，谈只有这个现象才能让我们成为社会的成功者。
    (1)as is symbolically depicted/shown in the set of drawings the fact that(重复上面的图画信息) profoundly indicates that 主题 is momentous (重要的) and fundamental to any one who undertakes great deeds. (2)undoubtedly it is 主题 that keeps us continually doing something valuable and admirable in spite of difficulties that makes us still full of energy to face the coming challenges and competition and that offers us the foundation for success. (3) according to a survey made by china daily 与主题相关的好的后果.(4)if 不这样的话 we will live a dull and depressing life or even feel loss of hope about the future. (5)only by 主题 can you put your capacities into full play and can you be the winner in the society。
    第三段为结束段落，总结全文内容并提出建议。首句可以说无论做大事还是小事无论做难事还是容易事都要这个积极现象。第二个句子谈建议让它变的更好。第三个句子谈让它变的更好的方法通常发挥它的好处避免坏处。第四句谈只要有这个积极现象就会享受一个美好丰富和有活力的未来。
    (1)from the above analysis it can be safely concluded that in doing things whether great or small 主题is indispensable on the way to success. (2)it is therefore necessary that some effective measures are taken to make 主题more efficient. (3)on one hand we should raise our awareness of its significance of 主题. on the other hand 不这样的现象应该批评. (4)only with主题 can we embrace a glorious future.